Date: 03/12/2010 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 4
Ohhh wonderful chapter. Very nice. But you know the bit that got me in the gut? The bit where Tim has gone and there are just the discarded bits left. The bloody gauze, the oxygen mask. The paniced destruction and then the silence. I had never thought about the debris left behind with a shooting like that. Excellent.
Author's Response: You won’t believe this, but whenever I manage to write a description that I think actually works (doesn’t happen too often), I think of you....your descriptions are so vivid, so real, and occasionally, very occasionally I get something that feels right, and I think, Precious would like that! And you did...that is so brilliant, THANK YOU!
Date: 03/12/2010 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 4
What a wonderful story. I do so like both Ziva's perspective and Tony's as well as Jimmy Palmers. Very good characterizations. Great story, but you never fail to please me with your Tim stories.
Author's Response: Oh thank you! It took me quite a while to get those hospital scenes anything like acceptable, so I am really pleased that you enjoyed them...and thank you for those kind words about my Tim stories...They are much appreciated!
Date: 03/12/2010 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 4
especially love Tony's emotional admission to Ziva. Seeing the 'real' Tony is nice.
Author's Response: Many thanks! I don’t always write Tony in a good light, sometimes I highlight his unfeeling side, so it was good to give him chance to show a ‘deeper’ Tony!
Date: 03/12/2010 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well, I liked it! :)
I've only recently discovered your stories and I'm a big fan! Hope to read much more of you work in the future...
Author's Response: As you know , I’m not really sure whether I’ve succeeded with this story so thank you for your comment! And thank you very much indeed for taking the time to read my stories!
Date: 03/12/2010 02:36 pm Title: Chapter 4
I'm glad Tim's birth family left the door open for visits by his work family. And very glad Tim survived. I'm also picturing Tim recieving acknowledgment/praise from Vance and perhaps a medal for his actions once he's recovered.
Author's Response: Of course Tim would get lots of plaudits for his wonderful work, and he’d deserve them too...I’ve already given him a medal in another story, but I don’t see why he can’t have more than one!! Thanks for commenting!
Date: 02/24/2010 03:32 pm Title: Chapter 3
Another cliffhanger like that??? Are you trying to kill me? :)
Excellent story! Please update soon!!
Author's Response: Many, many thanks for reading and commenting...and sorry to leave you on a cliffhanger again! I'm afraid updating may take some time...I re-read chapter 3 to get ready to start the final chapter, and I couldn't believe how bitty the writing was, the whole thing seemed so scruffy, no real fluidity to the story at all....I'm now thoroughly depressed about this story, and I don't have any enthusiasm to go back to it. I will finish it, but not yet...sorry to mess you about!!
Date: 02/23/2010 11:27 pm Title: Chapter 3
No! You can't kill Tim! I won't allow it. (Like I could stop you from writing whatever you want. Also, I so knew Tim watched the original Star Trek!)
Author's Response: I’m not going to kill Tim…not in this story…and I did think that if Tim knew Doctor Who, he would most certainly have seen the original Star Trek, even if only on DVD!!
Date: 02/23/2010 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh my God, this is great. Every scene is clear, with nothing but great action!
I love the last line on this chapter - Star Trek references rule.
Oh god, they shot our Probie!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much…I’m a bit worried with this one though…I think I’ve gone too far on the action only stuff, and I’ve neglected any inner thoughts and emotions from the team…but I did enjoy adding the Star Trek reference…I am after all a woman of a ‘certain age’, who saw the original series on its original broadcast dates!!
Date: 02/21/2010 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 2
Noooooo, don't kill Timmy!!!! Poor Abby, having to leave him behind like that, how horrible...
I hope you update soon. :)
Author's Response: I promise I would have posted a warning if this was a death fic, so don't worry about Tim...I agree it's horrible for Abby to leave him, but she had to do it, Ducky has to be warned! I'll try and update soon, I'm a bit stuck with the middle section of the next chapter...
Date: 02/21/2010 07:17 am Title: Chapter 2
you're so mean to leave it thre.
but such a good chapter.
bring on the next one.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I'm mean!! You leave cliff hangers all over the place!! I still have some work to do on the next chapter, so there could be a slight delay...
Date: 02/20/2010 01:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooooh, I can't wait till you update. Too much suspense, it's going to kill me! I hope Timmy and Abby will survive this adventure you've got planned for them! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for commenting! I've posted an update today, but there could be a little more suspense....